This has potential
Well first of all, the storyline is very good, something that can go further than your normal run of the mill game flash. You have a few good laughs in there and you did well because to many would just blow out the seriousness which should be intented. Sound is something that may be lacking, if your up to it for your sequal try making the voices yourself it would improve in my opionon.
I really enjoyed this, cant wait for the sequal!